[Story] DARK LINE BETWEEN

Title: DARK LINE BETWEEN
Author: bee_333
Genre(s): Fantasy Romance
Tags: Romance, Fantasy, Love, Mystery, War, Vampire (excludes some non-tags)
Audience: G
Main Lead: Female, Male
Status: Ongoing
AVB Assessment Score: PDE 1 CDD 2 SWB 1 || TQ 2 SV 1 || Overall: 7 (score explanation)
Number of Chapters: 30
Chapter Length: Short
Reading Level: Low
Date of First Release: January 2021
Date of Last Update: March 2021
AVB Reviewed? No
Available on Platform(s): Webnovel
Number of Views: 12.4K
Number of Reviews: 23
Synopsis:
She was raised by the Wilson’s not as their daughter but as a maid to their only child Annie, when love appears unexpectedly, Mirabella realizes that the world isn’t as plain as she thought, she found herself at the center of a pending war between creatures of the night. But she’s in for an even bigger shock, when she learns that she might not even be human.

Review(s)

TaintedMetal: Superb. You got the storytelling skills, the great updating schedule, as well as the ability of crafting characters and showing their traits to the reader (instead of telling) 
The only thing that’s offputting about this novel is the number of larger paragraphs, paragraphs that consist of too many sentences to the point where it looks like a large mountain of text. Regardless if the reader is reading on computer or mobile, I think it’s best to cut down the paragraphs; give them space so it’s easy on the reader’s eyes. 
Other than that, all else is good.

Cyclxne: I’m not usually the type to read romance novels, but here I am, writing a review for one. This book was able to draw me in with it’s interesting title.
No complaints about writing quality, except for slight punctuation errors here and there in dialogue. That is just formatting though, so there’s no need to worry about that.
Story development is great, I was able to immerse myself in the world of this novel and really follow along with the plot nicely with its perfect pace.
Character design is detailed and unique for each of the characters in this novel – something I can appreciate.
The world background could use some work, but this novel isn’t too focused on that, so this is something extremely minor.
Overall, this was a great read so far, and I’m looking forward to more chapters. Keep it up, author-san!

phoenixhyperion: Hello author! First of all, I want to praise you for the superb characters’ portrayal, detailed body language, and emotional descriptions. It was nicely crafted, I applaud you for that.  
But I may have a slight issue with regards to your story pacing, just a bit. I think it’s too fast, leaving some gaps in the story here and there. It’s not a bad thing, I assure you, it’s just that I got lost between parts. Like, in the initial chapter she said she’s alone and then someone came in? Then these two people appeared, I think you provide an explanation on what’s their relationship but it hasn’t sunk into me yet since it’s not highlighted too well. Like some important parts that answered the question “why are they in that situation?” is not elaborated well. She was treated badly at first, and it sounds like she hates him, and then in the next chapter, she actually likes him? Yeah, you got me lost on that part. 
But other than that, you’re story was superbly great. You describe your characters so well, I can picture them out vividly. And it’s an awesome thing. You did a great job with this story author! It’s mind-blowingly cool! Keep up the good work!

Story Post Last Updated: May 20, 2021

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