[Story] Second Chance War

Title: Second Chance War
Author: Hokobishu
Genre(s): War & Military Fiction
Tags:
Audience: PG-13
Main Lead: Male
Status: Ongoing
Number of Chapters: 55
Date of First Release: October 6, 2018
Date of Last Update: February 20, 2019
VB Assessment Score: TQ 3   PD 2   CF 2   ||   RL 2   CL 3  ||  Overall: 12
VB Reviewed? No
Number of Views: 225 K
Number of Reviews: 18
Synopsis:
WWII the bloodiest and most senseless war in history. There were humongous casualties among both sides during the war. Staff Sergeant Thomas Conlin was one of them, or so he thought. A secret experiment sends him back to the past before the war, alive surprisingly. Although there are a few hitches to that. There is another soul in his body out to kill him and he keeps phasing between his current reality, and the one he died in. All he wanted to do was keep as many people from dying during the war as possible, but will he be able to accomplish it or will he be destroyed by the powers he can’t control?

Review(s)

ikoyo: Great work. Good knowledge of the Italian campaign. The author has a good grasp of military operations and the chain of command. The description of events are so vivid that i can literally picture the actions as they are unfolding. The use of suspense is wonderful. In fact a big kudos to the author and a bug thank you to web novel for giving the author the platform to express himself.

killermniko: The story seems good. Having been around the Army, a few things in the story bothered me. Physical fitness training didn’t get regulized till the late 1940s. Most draftees got little to no training at all and were shipped out. I guess I can chalk it up to the time traveling. My experience with “Army Leaders” suggest they would not change their ways from just a dcument, but that’s just my opinion. Overall, I like how you presented creative training environments for the recruits. The story flows really well and descriptive conversation. The story has a grand objective and moving towards it. A definite must read for those interested in a twist on real life events.
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The writing done well. I found almost no mistakes. 5/5
You are regularly updating the novel and posted a new chapter frequently. 5/5
The story is going along very well. We know the goal and the motivation for the characters which is very important. 5/5
The main character is refreshing and has a sense of purpose to the story. 5/5
The only thing, I feel your story lacking good background descriptions. I’ve read quite a few diaries and retaleing of wars from POV books. The stories list so many details such as the smells, the sights, and the sounds. I think with a bit more descriptions you would have a fantastic story. 4/5
Either way, super exciting story. Best of luck to you author.

 
Story Post Last Updated: March 21, 2019

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