[Story] Unknowingly Lost

Title: Unknowingly Lost
Author: Nekonigiri001
Genre(s): Fantasy Romance
Tags: Vampire, Revenge, Mystery, Genie, Slow Burn Romance, Betrayal (excludes some non-tags)
Audience: G
Main Lead: Female, Male
Status: Ongoing
AVB Assessment Score: PDE 2 CDD 2 SWB 2 || TQ 3 SV 2 || Overall: 11
Number of Chapters: 171
Chapter Length: Medium
Reading Level: Medium
Date of First Release: September 8, 2020
Date of Last Update: March 8, 2021
AVB Reviewed? No
Available on Platform(s): Webnovel
Number of Views: 165.8K
Number of Reviews: 34
Synopsis:
Lucas is a vampire who works at a vampire-based corporation where only a handful of humans are aware of their existence. Sara’s delectable scent, amongst the human employees, attracted his attention. 
As a member of vampire aristocrats, Lucas held a Blood Red Party and invited Sara to be the Guest of Honour, omitting the fact that she will be the main course for him. 
Lucas became obsessed with the taste of her blood and wanted to keep her near for a fresh supply of blood. His attempt to seduce her failed miserably. As he tries to continuously deceive her, Sara finally fell in love without knowing he’s the predator and Lucas unknowingly fell into his own trap. From prey to love, he was not sure when it all started. 
Both never experience love. 
Both never understood love. 
Join these two as they slowly explore their feelings and embrace what comes their way. 
Take a back seat and read how they come to accept each other in their life. 

Review(s)

Glenstonx: Hi author!!!!! 
I’m intrigued by your writing style, I read a few of your chapters and I saw some errors I hope you will edit them soon. The character starts off by describing their personality and it really did so much for the characters’ traits and gradually described their physical appearance. The dialogues were pretty accurate too and some are funny. I hope you keep updating author! good job!

varean: This book is an easy 5 stars. It’s a bonus from me that I’m a lover of vampire stories, but to set aside bias, there’s still nothing bad to say about this book. The author’s quality writing is commendable that as an author too, I can learn from it.The pace of every chapter runs smoothly, and I love how easy and clear it is to read the paragraphs. The length of every chapter is just right. I love the way the author express the character’s emotion, it is that good to reach the reader’s hearts. I felt the thrill even from the first chapter. I’m excited to see this story reaching greater heights as it is well-written andwell-writtena worthy read.

YawningBrain: You. Yes, You, Reader! Read this ASAP! 
This story is certainly a good one, the start is intriguing and the character design is fantastic. The development of the story absorbs you and you will find yourself wanting more. The world background is very refreshing, a lot of mysteries plus vampires plus hilarious jokes plus… well find it yourself. 
Great job Author! I liked it very much so now I am following your story, hope to see more and more. The writing quality is improving each chapter and the flow of the plot is very well done. Keep up the good work! I can’t wait for more releases

Resurgent: Well, I have read some chapters so far…and the premise was interesting while the story line after that was engrossing even though FL novels are not my cup of tea. 
The characters are detailed enough but maybe it would be good to make the MC’s character more fleshed out. So far, she seems a bit naive? Maybe the character is supposed to be like that and we will see how she develops. 
The thrills and the mystery in this novel were legit. I am sure some chapters will keep you on your toes. 
And apart from some grammar hiccups, the writing quality is just fine. 
I hope the author keeps up his/her work and continue delivering amazing chapters 🙂

SolAce: The plot was steeped in mystery, and truth be told, that did make me on edge, wondering what would happen to the FL. But it’s very complex at the get go with the different reactions of the side characters, namely Bryce and Harith. 
Here are some of the issues I see here: 
1. Grammar— I’ve noticed quite a lot of run-on sentences the more I read as well as incorrect verb tenses. Would recommend you fix it quickly with grammarly or another grammar correcting app as the beginning chapters is especially important to draw in new readers ! 
2. Story development & Characters— At first, I was fine, but the more I read, the more confused I began to get due to the flow of the characters’ emotions. It feels slightly forced upon rather than natural. Like for example, when Bryce told Harith about ‘She wanted to keep it pure’, Harith did break down, and I can understand to a certain degree if he recalls something. Yet I also felt it was too abrupt. 
My advice would probably to look up references of how to show emotions in writing, as it will help in the immersion of your fans. 
3. My suggestions for plot— Now this one is entirely my opinion, but I felt the need to say that you may need to give a hint or two about the vampires to the readers early on to hook them properly. Maybe like a more detailed description— forgive my rambling xD 
All in all though, the story is pretty clean, and I enjoyed it ! So keep up the good work, Author !

Story Post Last Updated: March 16, 2021

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