Title: At Last I Found You In My World
Genre(s): Magical Realism
Tags: Romance, Action, Modern, Harem, Comedy, Supernatural
Main Lead: Male
AVB Assessment Score: PDE 1 CDD 1 SWB 2 || TQ 2 SV 1 || Overall: 7 (score explanation)
Number of Chapters: 25
Chapter Length: Medium
Reading Level: Medium
Date of First Release: January 2021
Date of Last Update: March 2021
AVB Reviewed? No
Available on Platform(s): Webnovel
Number of Views: 35.8K
Number of Reviews: 24
He came out of meteorite crash. The world is unknown to him. But there he met her and he found someone he can grow attached. But no one knows his secret, not even her. Will he ever tell her? What will happen to them in the future?
Grotesquelce: I like the premise of the story yet I feel like the world building is lacking though this can easily be solved in the coming chapters. The first chapter seemed like an info dump just to get to where the main character is but I guess it was intended this way. The story makes me very curious as to who Ray Tristan is.
Some minor lapses in grammar is also present although it is understandable and can easily be fixed. I wish you luck in your upcoming chapters. Keep up the good work.
Sigheti: I must confess I have been quite candid while writing this review, more so than I usually would be. This is in the hope to help you progress, rather than to simply song you praise. So with that in mind:
While I clearly recognise the effort you take to tell us your story, I find it very difficult to immerse myself. I do not feel invited to read beyond the first few paragraphs. I could account this to two things: firstly, the poor sentence structure and grammar, and secondly, the lack of rhythm.
The protagonist himself is engaging, and he has a certain youthful nativity about him that makes him entertaining.
Lastly, I wish to bring up the chemistry, which feels very obligatory, and does not thoroughly convince me. I do recognise that this is very hard to write.
I hope I did not dissuade you too much and wish you a lot of fun continuing your story.
TaintedMetal: I’ll give credit to the author for uploading multiple chapters within a day it seems. IN addition, I can see that this novel is doing what it can to present an interesting and cohesive storyline.
The ideas are here, although there needs to be some revisions for some parts of the story, which have telling instead of showing. In addition there isn’t much to say about the characters or the setting of the novel itself, but I suppose they will be explored later on.
Keep on writing author. It’s best you double check on your structure of the novel, how sentences flow. Maybe take your time on the chapters and their respective uploads. Good luck.
Story Post Last Updated: June 28, 2021