Title: To You, Six Hundred Years From Now.
Tags: Action, Adventure, Magic, Science Fiction, Magic (excluded some non-tags)
Main Lead: Female
AVB Assessment Score: PDE 2 CDD 2 SWB 2 || TQ 3 SV 2 || Overall: 11
Number of Chapters: 30
Chapter Length: Medium
Reading Level: Medium
Date of First Release: November 29, 2020
Date of Last Update: December 20, 2020
AVB Reviewed? No
Available on Platform(s): Webnovel
Number of Views: 14.8K
Number of Reviews: 12
In a world born of the divine union of magic and science, the Kaisers and Kaiserin of old are nothing but myths. Stories told to children to make sure that they would go to sleep. And for a long time, that was all people treated the Kaisers as – bedtime stories. After all, who could fathom the amount of power held by figures as legendary as them?
October 24th, 2095, changed all of that.
The Kaiserin of Motion awakened far out in the frosty wastelands of Jotunheim, crushing the facility that housed in. It all happened in seconds – after her resurgence, she immediately vanished. In her place was Ilise Rossweisse: A girl no older than fifteen, wielding the power of a god.
Thrust into a whole new world, Ilise must learn to control the might of the Kaiserforce within her – before it controls her. She has no time to ponder over the abstract, to delve within her internal worries; instead, she must cling to the material elements of her life. Her friends, her family, and the world around her.
She knows that her other self lurks deep within her, yearning to be released. Ilise is the first and last line of defence against the Kaiserin of Motion. Should her will and determination ever falter, Ragnarok will begin. The first of many Kaisers will awaken her comrades, and in time, Earth will be naught but ruins.
With her awakening, other gears have been set into motion. Ancient forces will emerge from the shadows, in an attempt to bring an end to a war that has been waged since time immemorial. And they will do whatever it takes to end their eternal war – no matter the price, nor the cost.
It is only through pushing forward that they can put these memories to rest and finally, at long last, begin to dream again.
MortalLearner: Read a few chapters and I was kind of confused which made me re-read the whole chapters again. The storyline is good and interesting with that sort of imagination. You’re absolutely good at putting your imagination into words. The characters are well developed. However, I feel like the plot is not gripping enough to keep the reader engaged.
Nevertheless, you’ve done a good job so far.
NakedApron: Writing Quality:
Maybe break the big paragraphs into smaller ones. Your choice.
The prologue is amazing. It’s gripping, intense and most importantly, easy to understand. Perhaps the MC’s simple way of thinking and speaking helps.
But from the beginning of the actual story, the story starts to slow down and show some Characterization and some slight World-building. They’re not big, but definitely there. Then the story starts progressing towards the Academy and starts to show how other people look at the MC.
I’m having trouble with some inconsistencies here. Some people act openly aggressive with her for no apparent reason(for the time being, at least), like the principal and the Siegfried dude, which is slightly confusing and forced… But maybe it will be explained later. Maybe some of them know she’s a Kaiserina and their hate is leaking out.
Anyway, other than that, it’s going on a nice and interesting pace.
Keep up the good work
lilGoat: I think it’s somewhat unfair to judge this work at this point, as it seems to me that a much bigger story is yet to unfold and that the chapters currently available are nothing but a glimpse to it.
I will say that I think the writing is phenomenal, although rough around the edges. I enjoyed the descriptions thoroughly and it was very easy to tell characters apart, whether it be their style or their mannerisms of speech.
The prologue was very interesting and intense, I read through it very quickly and I thought its’ pacing was very good. The later part of the story was just not as much my cup of tea, but it was still very well written, and the Female Lead of this story is quite charming and easy to relate to.
In general the way the characters interact with one another comes off very natural and makes the reading experience very enjoyable as it reels you in.
I’m curious to see what the future holds for young Ilise.
Story Post Last Updated: April 8, 2021
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