[Story] Redeeming The Golden Ticket To Life

Title: Redeeming The Golden Ticket To Life
Author: sagorika_adhikari
Genre(s): Contemporary Romance
Tags: Romance, Action, Modern, Mystery, Parenthood, Time-Travel, Sci-Fi (excluded some non-tags)
Audience: –
Main Lead: Female, Male
Status: Ongoing
AVB Assessment Score: PDE 1 CDD 1 SWB 2 || TQ 2 SV 1 || Overall: 7
Number of Chapters: 119
Chapter Length: Short
Reading Level: Low
Date of First Release: October 16, 2020
Date of Last Update: February 26, 2021
AVB Reviewed? No
Available on Platform(s): Webnovel
Number of Views: 636.5K
Number of Reviews: 58
Synopsis:
Elizabeth was an elite agent in the prestigious futuristic civilisation called ‘Star Time System’. Until a mission took her life. Everything turned upside down as …
She got reincarnated in her past life as Bai Chang.
Bai Chang woke up after being three long years in a coma. What greets her is a new life in human’s past civilisation in the 21st century.
Bai Chang’s path entangles with a certain CEO because of some accident in the past.
While our CEO, Hu Qiang, wants to be a part of Bai Chang’s life as, she is his wife and mother of his child, Xiao Wei.
Come along all of you readers and join us in together for a roller-coaster ride called ‘Life’.

Review(s)

Pill_Guy: I love the story and the characters, my main issue is the writing quality seems to be consistently lower than the first 5 chapters. I noticed a lot of clunky sentences or inappropriate use of a word or incorrect form of a word. I think that you could probably see the problems if you re-read the passages out loud.
Other than a few awkward sentences here and there, the content itself is good. Keep it up.

nyype: I liked the topic, the vibe of MC, humor of author and the pace of story.
Little bit character development required, but it doesnt have to be in the earlier chapters. So I am positive about it. Just I dont find necessary to see indicators of POV of characters. Well, I used to read weird chinese translations so I can easily understand, but may be it is different for all. I cant judge this point.
Hope everybody may give this novel a try. It is good one, probably you will like it as well

KeCha: There are some key factors that i like and dislike about this book.
1) i like the transmigration from future to past.
2) i like how she’s already married with a kid. Plus the interaction from father to child.
I guess that’s just the plot.
1) I don’t like how this story is written in first point of view. I guess that’s just preference. It’s a little weird for a story because there’s a clear distinction between reader and character. For example, if a scene was acted out with the protagonist laughing, we as the viewer literally see that. In a story format in first point of view, the reader will be reading “I laughed”. I find that very off putting because i didn’t laugh. I don’t know if you get what i mean. I think third point of view(he/she/(name)/they) will be a better option.
2) Grammar and coherence. Some sentences can be structured more fluently so it can flow better.

Bunny_SL: So, this is going off on a good start with a lot of descriptions, some world-building and plot development. I haven’t finished reading but each chapter leaves the reader thinking, “What’s going to happen next?”
This is great as it makes the reader want to explore more about this system and the characters in more detail. You’re doing great for the story so far!
A couple of things that I have noticed are some of the grammatical errors, long sentences and bulky paragraphs.
Try to fix some of the grammar like adding commas and semicolons in the correct place. It was a little bit difficult to read and comprehend the descriptions with some of the grammatical error along.
Try breaking down the sentences into digestible chunks so that readers can enjoy the details slowly.
Apart from that, it wasn’t unreadable and generally was smooth.
Sorry if I’m criticising a bit too much but I hope you can improve more as a fellow author! Even when I write, it’s difficult to notice these little things until I proofread a few times.
Just a little tweaking will do and keep up with the amazing content!
Bunny

JcPancakes: Writing Quality:
I enjoyed the writing very much. There’s a good command of English, coupled with a good range of vocabulary.
The scenes and expressions were descriptive and detailed.
It feels like I’m reading a translated CN novel.
However, there are several minor punctuation, typos and grammatical mistakes. They are mostly inconsequential.
Break down large paragraphs to ease the reading. Reduce commas.
The frequent shifting of POVs can be disorientating.
Stability of Updates:
Updates are a little on and off but nothing too major.
Story Development:
The story started with an interesting transmigration premise. As a transmigration story, there will be plenty of interesting events from Bai Chang’s original knowledge.
There are also several foreshadowing and mysteries that keeps the reader engaged and curious.
Character Design:
I like the interactions between the characters.
Thank god, it isn’t another arrogant bratty male lead.
World Background:
The story is currently on a modern setting. It’s immaticualted described, well done.
I’m curious on Bai Chang’s original more advanced world. Whelp, have to wait for it, I guess.