Title: Rise of king Arthur
Tags: R-18, System, Adventure, magic, action, comedy, maids, Weak to Strong, Kingdom Building
Main Lead: Male
AVB Assessment Score: PDE 1 CDD 1 SWB 2 || TQ 2 SV 1 || Overall: 7
Number of Chapters: 59
Chapter Length: Medium
Reading Level: Medium
Date of First Release: November 23, 2020
Date of Last Update: March 10, 2021
AVB Reviewed? No
Available on Platform(s): Webnovel
Number of Views: 138.9K
Number of Reviews: 45
In a fantasy world where there is magic, martial arts, various fairy and demon race, where magical beasts roam, Our MC Arthur is getting bullied for his meek personality. When he turned 20, he was assassinated even though he is a noble. But he travels back in time and gets a system called the Lust King System.
So he starts his life again but this time he will do things differently….
Kamatis: This story is really good, just to be honest… Your typical harem bullshitery turned to something amazing and palpable… But what amazed me the most are not the characters, pacing, or world building… It’s the narrative… The author writes the story with vivid imagination and detailed narrations… leaving the readers with desire to read more… Anyways, this is a good book and keep up the good work
Crackgear: An interesting view in a retelling of King Arthur. Though a little sarcasm and black comedy here and there, the initian is superb.
A gratitude from me to you, this is actually quite comedic. Writing quality is as follows a good one. Volume, detail and also tenses are better and more responsive here.
Stability of updates is decent as well, better than the other stories.
Character design wise a little here and there of flaws but pretty good in my opinion. The MC is literally King Arthur but with a twist. A more child-like and rather silly personality than its original archetype.
World background has a little bit of a problem but slowly gets to the point, though a little lagging behind.
Pretty good effort and also a slow increase in detailling is nice. An honest opinion, keep up the good work Author!
SolAce: From King Arthur to the KIng of Lust, this feels like a different take on the ancient, royal name. I found the flow pretty smooth for me, which is a good perk.
Here are some of my issues though:
1. Grammar— I only showed corrections up to chapter 2, but I hope you see the missing commas, misspellings, and spacing issues I tried to correct. You seem to have trouble with run-on sentences, so I would recommend checking Grammarly or another grammar correcting app to see if it can assist you.
2. Flow— It was good, but it could improve more. My suggestion would be to combine 2 sentences into a compound sentence, as it gives for a smoother experience. Additionally, conjunctions are the way to go !
3. Story development and Character— While the plot was novel, I found the character to not be to my liking. Maybe he will grow to be stronger later, but I would have enjoyed at least one redeeming quality about him.
However, don’t get discouraged ! We all start from somewhere; only difference is the little things we do to improve, so I hope you enjoy your writing and take my advice with a grain of salt. After all, this is your story ! Keep up the good work, Author !
Story Post Last Updated: March 12, 2021