[Story] Chasing Paradise

Title: Chasing Paradise
Author: ZachSkye
Genre(s): Action, Adventure, Fantasy
Tags: Sci-fi, Artificial Intelligence, GameLit, High Fantasy, LitRPG, Magic, Male Lead, Portal Fantasy, Isekai, Virtual Reality (excluded non tag)
Audience:(contains Gore, Profanity)
Main Lead: Male
Status: Ongoing
VB Assessment Score: PDE 1 CDD 1 SWB 2 || TQ 3 SV 2 || Overall: 9
Number of Chapters: 28
Chapter Length: Medium
Reading Level: Medium
Date of First Release: November 20, 2020
Date of Last Update: December 22, 2020
VB Reviewed? No
Available on Platform(s): Royal Road
Number of Views: 6,823
Number of Reviews: 3
Synopsis:
Chasing Paradise is a litrpg that follows a man hired to test a new revolutionary virtual world. James is not only one of the lucky few allowed into the beta but also recruited to be part of an experimental trial. This trial seeks to test new equipment intended for lengthening immersion time in the virtual world. With little care for the wreckage of a life he left behind, James throws himself into his new position. Maybe this new world and job will be just what he needs to grow.
Natalus promises to deliver a way forward for him, even if it’s in a world that isn’t real. 

Review(s)

Eligos: This is for the first six chapters of Chasing Paradise. 
It’s pretty great so far. There’s no immediate power up, and though things are suggested through quest screens nothing is handed to the MC. Things go badly for him reasonably often, and he’s obviously still getting his legs in this new world. There’s a good amount of tension. No glaring typos and dialogue is formatted correctly
If I’d like to see anything, it would be slightly more variance in the paragraph sizes. The vast majority seem tend to be a similar length, which can lead to some monotony in the format (though not the content!)

Dr.4C: This is a bit premature of a review and I will update it as the story progresses but for what I’ve read uptil now, it makes me want to keep reading further. 
Style: The style lets down the story a bit at the start where there’s slightly longer sentences and paragraphs. A lack of tension in high octane moments. It gets better after chapter 10, but there are still occurrences of these. 
Story: A lack of a definite hook and some lack of tension in the initial chapters. It’s pretty hard to get behind the MC because his motivations are kept vague. I’d love to know why he wants to leave behind the real world and chase paradise (I’m sorry it was hard to resist) in a VR Game. 
Grammar: Minor misspelling, wrong usage of words and incomplete sentences. But very very rare. Fine other from those occasional hiccups. 
Characters: Easily the best part of the story. Each of the characters have managed to develop their own style in such a short time, making them feel alive. Hinting at their backstories and setting up their mannerisms makes me look forward to reading more. A small issue I have is that the MC is a bit of a blank slate which ties into my earlier problem with the lack of hook. Hope it gets revealed soon.

JAnthony: To preface this review, I do not read Lit-RPG often despite being here on RR.
Chasing Paradise starts off a bit slow, there’s not a huge hook. It’s reminiscint of a scenic movie opening. It’s eases you in, there’s not anything that demands your attention but nothing to urge you to leave either.
As the story progresses characters become real, fleshed out, and have their own personalities. They are easily the best part of this story. Each one feels like it becomes defined early on and you can anticipate how they will act as you get to know them better.
The style is very dialogue heavy, with little prose. Not a bad thing, but descriptions are more sparse than I’m used to. A thing to look forward is the dialogue is real and believable. I would like to see more prose throughout but that’s a stylistic choice.
Grammar is fairly solid throughout with correct dialogue tags, very few mispelled words and missing commas. Nothing that has detracted from the reading experience.
The story feels fun and lighthearted. To me it reads as if a feel-good story. While there is tension and conflict, majority of the story has an airy feel to it. I would consider this a palette cleanser if it was a food.
Solid work so far, glad I had the oppurtunity to read it.

Story Post Last Updated: December 27, 2020

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