[Story] An ‘Ordinary’ Adventure

Title: An ‘Ordinary’ Adventure
Author: Kamikoto
Genre(s): Action, Adventure, Comedy
Tags: Fantasy, Anti-Hero Lead, High Fantasy, Magic, Male Lead, Mythos, Portal Fantasy, Isekai, Reincarnation, Secret Identity, Supernatural (excluded non tag)
Audience:(contains Gore, Profanity)
Main Lead: Male
Status: Ongoing
VB Assessment Score: PDE 2 CDD 2 SWB 2 || TQ 3 SV 2 || Overall: 11
Number of Chapters: 43
Chapter Length: Medium
Reading Level: Medium
Date of First Release: February 17, 2020
Date of Last Update: December 14, 2020
VB Reviewed? No
Available on Platform(s): Royal Road
Number of Views: 25,675
Number of Reviews: 24
Synopsis:
A series of unfortunate events lead to the self-proclaimed ordinary guy, Knight Yuudai, to be imprisoned in another world. He, and a young girl he was imprisoned with, must escape together.
They will travel across the demon-infested Dragon Lands to reach the exiled races, who were born from the Elder Dragon. Along the way he must fight the parasites that are the demons.
His journey will make him bear witness to the horrors and wonders this world has to offer, while desperately searching for the last bit of familiarity that resides at the floating world tree.

Review(s)

Dawod Dawod: Let’s see… let’s start with grammar. By the time I got to reading, the chapters have already been edited and fixed by others. So in terms of typos, I couldn’t spot any while reading so far.
The story has been interesting, definitely different from the average isekai. In terms of structure, it’s clearly taken inspiration from light novels. Those not familiar with those types of stories might need a bit of time to adjust, but I am personally a fan of it.
In terms of a main strength, I’d say this author’s strength is his worldbuilding and descriptions.
Characters are varied and the MC is definitely atypical from other MCs. Let’s just say it has the secret identity and anti-hero tags for a reason.
Overall, if you like anime-like stories and light novels, this could be the fic for you.

kawaiiCinnamonroll: The story in a nutshell:
Our ordinary guy Knight gets brought into a new world by a mysterious person through an accident. He awakens in a prison and together with a golden eyed girl he has to get out of that place before he can truly begin his “isekai” adventure.
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In general the idea of the story is pretty unique and the author did a great job writing it out.
However The first half or so of the book is pretty bumpy and very confusing. I was tempting to give it 3 stars at most but the later chapters changed that.
At first the characters had been pretty lacking in depth and personality. Especially Knight who made some unreasonable choices and with his thoughts making little sense.
In addition to that there was a lot of confusion as many things didn’t get explained. While it can be a good nice to keep secrets from readers, planning to reveal them later on, an author shouldn’t let the readers be completely in the dark.
Luckily, the author does more explaining in later chapters and the characters get more fleshed out too. You even start to relate with the characters. 
All in all it was an enjoyable read!

Thedude3445: Ehh… This story has got that certain type of content that makes me not as much a fan as I would have liked, and that’s a pet peeve of mine—serious comedy. There isn’t anything wrong with it, but when I am getting a silly comedy story, which a whole lot of An ‘Ordinary’ Adventure is, what I’m not looking for is many chapters all about the physical pain and emotional torment of the characters, played entirely seriously. It’s done a lot in anime, and a lot of people like it, but I sadly do not. 
Actually, this book is very, very much like an anime series, and is formatted very closely to a Japanese light novel. That’s for good and for bad. For the good, it means lots of jokes and weird silly stuff. The main character’s name is Knight, which is exactly the kind of on-the-nose joke that makes me giggle. And the dialogue is filled with comedic moments. But also like a light novel, the prose is flat and doesn’t do enough to describe characters, settings, or action. If you’re used to fan translated light novel writing, though, you won’t bat an eye, I think.
The biggest problem with the story then, for me, is the stretched-out feeling of everything. I read through Chapter 1, which was divided into about 13 parts and took somewhere around 80 or 90 pages I believe. However, it dragged on and on with an extended action/escape scene and chapters that didn’t even have a full scene to themselves. Chapter 1 felt like it was supposed to be a fast-paced intro, but the way it was written was too sluggish to get itself going. I believe the chapter could be cut in half length-wise and still come out on top, so the length as it is is mostly excess.
But I still think this is a perfectly OK story for those who want a silly (but not that silly) light novel-esque adventure. That’s just not my favorite subgenre.

Nameless32: WARNING: This story does contain lolis.
An ‘Ordinary’ Adventure is a colorful contrast between dark, serious, and borderline gory and comedic and lighthearted. This combination is very hard to pull off, and though it does need edits in some places, where it works, it really works.
The MC is a semi-snarky fish-out-of-water type character, and a huge plus for having him as the POV is that you’re just as confused as he is in the opening parts. Everything seems fast, panicky, and overall just amazingly tense. Huge plus over here, author!
However, to contrast with that, the pacing past those opening chapters is sluggish. The story itself seems pretty interesting, but it’s just the amount of filler and repetition that holds it back from shining it its fullest. 
To add to that, what helped add to the tone and feel of the first two parts persists where it shouldn’t. The light novel-esque prose that really shone earlier on is sadly this story’s biggest weakness in the later parts. And, as I said, there are some places where dark and gritty clashes with light and funny in unpleasant ways. However, all of this can be patched up with some more editing and structure. We also get to see some interesting characters aside from the MC, but they haven’t gotten too much fleshing out just yet.
Gramatically, I only noticed a few things here and there, definitely not anything that impacts the reading experience too much. Pretty good job with this aspect 🙂
Overall, I’d say that this story is good, and has the potential to be something great. The only big minus currently is the prose, and even that gets better the further on you go. If/when that gets fixed, it’ll be an absolute treat to read, and even currently it’s worth your time if you’re used to light novel-style writing.
Past that, it has an interesting story, good characters, and lots of funny moments to share. Keep it up, Kamikoto!

Briizy: The premise of this story was phenomenal, and the idea of the story was well executed. I found myself enjoying the first six chapters, and I know I will continue to enjoy the coming chapters as I keep on reading 🙂 
Grammar
The grammar is well-executed, and I found trouble finding things to suggest. Well done in that department 🙂
Style
The author’s style is something I found a little hard to get used to. I think this is because I am also a writer, and not just a reader, but the style is very different from my own and it took a while to get into the right mindset. That being said, once I was able to put myself in the right place, I found myself enjoying the premise. 
Story
The story is the only thing I could tick down on, and that is because of the way the writing style is portrayed. I think it might be because the style of comedy just isn’t to my taste, or simply just not a writing style I’m used to, but it drew me back. Something small, and probably due to my own bias, which is why I only ticked it down .5 star!
Character
I quite enjoyed the characters in this story! They provide life to the story, and each one has their own personality and qualities that are put forth to the bigger picture. Moving puzzle pieces that feel real, feel unique and are nice to follow. One of my favorite aspects to this story was the characters! Which is good, at least in my eyes 😀 Characters are hard to portray, but the author has portrayed them well. 
For a style that I’m not used to, this was a phenomenal piece of writing. I enjoyed it and will keep reading it to see where this “Ordinary” adventure takes me 🙂 

I don’t bite…: To be honest, I’m in a bit of a quandary about this. On one hand, I could feel the writer’s passion behind their craft, on the other, reading through the first chapter was sometimes a painful experience for me. Maybe because recently I’ve developed a bit of skill towards critical reading, the faults seemed all the more glaring to me…
To the writer’s credit, they did improve their craft in the most recent chapters…
Style: The biggest weakness of the story, redundancy. Repetition, when done with moderation and proper skill can sometimes be the strength of a story, but too much, and it becomes a shackle that hinders the story’s progression…
In the case of this story, the abundance of redundancy in both narrative and word choice makes it a chore to trudge through in the earlier chapters. The later chapters did become cleaner and the repetitive style of writing was discarded, making the story more bearable, much to my relief…
Story: Up till now there’s only a vague idea of a story but nothing concrete. The earlier chapters are quite stagnant and there’s not much feeling of progression there. When it does start to pick up, we have little idea about the goal of the story. Although it’s not a bad thing having a vague goal for a story, the picture that the story has a goal should be clear. in this case, even that picture is vague. the feeling of progression is barely there…
Grammar: With my limited grammar skills, I didn’t spot too many errors that took away from my experience and comprehension…
Character: The second biggest in the weakness department. All of them felt very inconsistent, even the MC, whom I couldn’t figure out the thought process of even when the author spelt out his thoughts…
All in all, as far as fictions go, it starts pretty poorly, though that might be more due to a lack of skill rather than effort, as proven by the fact that the author has improved significantly in the recent chapters. In my opinion, if the story is tightened up some more and the structure improved it has the potential to be better…
And though the beginning is hard to read, if you just skim through it by skipping over the details, it becomes much easier…
That said, I wish the writer good luck and hope they’re able to improve their craft and the story further…
(BTW, all above are my personal opinion)

Unintelligent Donkey: Style – The novel employs a third-person perspective, but it’s heavily focused on the MC, so we pretty much know only as much as the MC does. The pacing starts out pretty fast and slightly confusing, as we and Knight claw our way through the dungeon and whatever situation he’s suddenly been thrust into. To a certain degree, this works by building up a mystery that hooks in the reader. But, personally, I feel like it went a bit on too long, and past the first few chapters, it slows down a bit too much.
However, I was pretty invested in the story trying to find out what the whole situation was really like, and as I read further, I started to enjoy the style the author employs, swapping between more serious moments and super hilarious ones. I guess that’s what kind of got me addicted to the story, and I guess I’ll definitely be coming back for more every week!
Grammar – I read a few reviews mentioning the grammar, the sentence structure comes off as a bit odd, but I think that’s mostly to do with personal tastes, and since I didn’t really spot anything that screamed mistakes, I think the author’s done a pretty good job cleaning up! So if the other reviews are discouraging you from reading this masterpiece because of the grammar, you should probably ignore that.
Story – I kind of mentioned it in style, the pacing is slightly inconsistent, but I think its intentional, the first arc should serve as a hook, and the next few arcs should slow done and explain things a bit. I think this novel does this pretty well, which shows that it should’ve been planned out pretty well, so the future arcs should connect pretty well with what we know right now/
Character – I feel like Knight definitely draws a lot of inspiration from the more comedic MCs in Japanese light novels, as you read, it gets pretty clear that he’s definitely someone sent here by truck-kun. He’s not someone with upstanding moral qualities, but he’s not exactly the scum of the earth either, he’s pretty much your average joe, gobsmacked into this world of fantasy and magic.
The other characters so far are pretty varied, I see a few archetypes, but overall, they’re pretty well written and have their own flare. I definitely have to say, the author’s ability to write characters is definitely his strongest strength for me! 

[omitted other reviews due to length and enough content shown above]

Story Post Last Updated: December 22, 2020

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