Title: The Most Satisfied Reincarnate
Tags: System, Reincarnation, Adventure, Magic, Action, Transmigration, Western Fantasy, Male Mc, Slow-Paced
Main Lead: Male
VB Assessment Score: PDE 1 CDD 1 SWB 2 || TQ 2 SV 1 || Overall: 7
Number of Chapters: 44
Chapter Length: Medium
Reading Level: Low
Date of First Release: September 17, 2020
Date of Last Update: December 1, 2020
VB Reviewed? No
Available on Platform(s): Webnovel
Number of Views: 415.6K
Number of Reviews: 32
Desmond, the heir of the number one dangerous mafia organization, had a strange view of humanity. Since childhood, he was used to murdering; he always thought humans were nothing more than tools except for his family. But because of this reason, he died at the hands of the humans. The moment when he was dying, unconsciously he got transported to another dimension that filled with magic and monsters. Will he choose to destroy humanity? Or forgetting his past and chooses to enjoy this new world?
SnowPenguin: The story and the world is very interesting with a lot of attention to detail. To improve, there needs to be some work done with sentence structure and having exposition be dealt out more organically like through dialogue.
succulentgumbo: An exciting story depicting the reincarnation of a protagonist who manages to evade death, but in a rather unique way. Though there may be small mistakes here and there, I don’t have a problem overlooking them, as the story itself is quite enjoyable to read.
Zerofuggs: I will give it to you straight, you need to work on your grammar. The story is overused which isn’t a negative in its own right, but your execution itself is unoriginal. I read through the first 3 chapters, and skimmed through 4. Although your character is being presented as an unintelligent and uninspired plank, I find it hard to connect with him at all… I hope you keep writing. Your story is fine if you just want to entertain yourself, but as reading material it is below sub-par. (Ps: Work on your capitalization)
AxISLL: Your characters are well rounded, consistent, and that’s good. The setting is solid and you managed to not make anything feel out of place. Good job with this.
However. You really need to improve your grammar. The way you switch between the past and present tense makes it tedious and exhausting to read. You also sometimes overextend with the descriptions and provide redundant information to the text. With less but stronger information the reader will easily catch the mental image you as as the author have. Never underestimate your readers.
There are some grammar correction apps available for free you can try out if you aren’t a native English speaker. They’ll help you a lot.
Otherwise the plot is solid and moves in a good direction. Keep working on it.
LyingCrowPromises: The premise of the story is good. A family running away from enemies gets to live a new life after a long time. At the same time, one of their children is a reincarnated boy who prides himself in being selfish, which will become his strength in the new world. He even gets a system that helps him grow.
The writing quality is, honestly, readable, but it contains many mistakes, from punctuation to grammar and spelling. Especially the first chapter. If you fix the first chapter a bit, I think you’d be better off.
Characters are all interesting, but still not well-developed, but I know that takes time to learn and do.
World background is the usual medieval fantasy magic, but still well-written nonetheless, so I have no complaints. I’d like the author to expand on it, and to also, when describing, pays attention to how they write, as they have the tendency to write everything that is a part of the plot instead of doing it mildly.
Anyway, I like the story, and hope that the author will improve even further. Do your best!
Story Post Last Updated: December 5, 2020
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