[Story] Apocalypse: Generic System

Title: Apocalypse: Generic System
Author: Macronomicon
Genre(s): Action, Adventure, Fantasy
Tags: Dungeon, GameLit, High Fantasy, Magic, Male Lead
Audience:(contains Gore, Profanity, Sexual Content, Traumatizing content)
Main Lead: Male
Status: Ongoing
VB Assessment Score: PDE 2 CDD 2 SWB 2 || TQ 3 SV 3 || Overall: 12
Number of Chapters: 20
Chapter Length: Medium
Reading Level: Medium
Date of First Release: September 5, 2020
Date of Last Update: November 11, 2020
VB Reviewed? No
Available on Platform(s): Royal Road
Number of Views: 323K
Number of Reviews: 41
Jeb Trapper tried to kill himself. The gun jammed.
Two months later the vet is participating in underground trials of ecstacy to treat his PTSD.
Everything seemed to be going great until…
>>>The System has Been Installed<<<
Now he’s got to choose the difficulty of his tutorial.
Just one problem.
He’s high as a kite, and nothing seems Impossible.


Half Life: Jeb is former military. At the beginning of the story, he is suffering from PTSD, which drives him to participate in an underground medical study using MDMA. He is in the middle of the treatment when the system hits an unsuspecting Earth, so he’s not in the clearest state of mind when forced to choose a difficulty level.
All of that sounds like an interesting setup. However, that leads me to my biggest complaint about the story. Perhaps the most interesting thing about Jeb as a character is the PTSD. However, once it is used for justifying his questionable decision making, it is treated as an afterthought. He moves right into being a tough-minded, resilient warrior without much of a blip. No depression, no panic attacks… nothing.
He isn’t the only character with trauma. Jessica also seems to have suffered things (“in-game”) that leave a meaningful mental scar. However, I find her to be a much more believable character in that she still reacts to that mental scarring whenever events touch on the relevant subject.
That said, the story is great fun and I am enjoying it.
The writing is clear and straightforward. Grammar is good, with very few noticeable errors. Making this an easily accessible and pleasurable read.

TentaclesMaster: A version of “The tutorial is too hard” in which the MC chooses the difficulty Impossible / Hell. Well, nothing new under the sun.
This one is rather well written, even if it is well below the original. But for RR it’s not so bad, despite the obvious trousers in the plot and the feeling that people other than the MC are all less intelligent. (Let me believe that he is the only one who thought of making the same choice. My ass)
I guess the author has relied on his readership of his old fiction to get to the top of the trend.
MC also starts with PSTDs, but as soon as it appears, it is never mentioned again, as if by magic. It’s making fun of the syndrome itself and spitting on everyone who has it. Will alone is useless against this, but it doesn’t even affect the CD anymore. 
RLY? The first character trait of your MC went in the garbage just like that? 
In conclusion, the writing isn’t bad, rather logical given that this is the author’s fourth book, but the fights are still soft and a bit fuzzy, and a harem will probably come sooner or later.

Pyth: Pretty generic just like the title, i don’t understand why there is so much praise for a barely above average story like this? The system is basic with 3 stats: body, magic and intelligence. Then you have the difficulty for the tutorial ofc the author made the mc drunk in that convenient time when he had to choose the difficulty(he chose impossible difficulty ofc). Generic so far right? Yeah, well moving on. The mc is teleported to the tutorial world, he is given stuff to survive like food,weapons supplies and armor. He is also given 15 points to invest for his stats. Now here is the part that i really am confused by till now, so basically you are in a life or death situation and these stat points are what’s going to give you the power to kill monsters to survive. What does the mc choose to invest in? mAgiC ofc ofc, and not just that he invests ALL his points into mAgiC. So you now you have an mc who has no proficiency in magic no knowledge of it, but still chooses to invest ALL his points into it? makes sense i guess. Anyways the mc needs info on the place he’s in so he asks the fairy smurfs that only people with magic points above 12 can see. He uses m&ms to ask for informaton and it works like a charm. Now this is where i was considering my life choices, because i thought this was a survival rpg story where the mc builds himself up both physically and mentally to be able to beat the ”impossible” and would meet people along the way to help him and cover his weaknesses. The mc is mentally unstable before the tutorial but once he is teleported into it he is suddenely fine? This doesn’t make sense at all. There are so many flaws that i can cover but don’t have the time to dive into this review is long enough, the grammar is fine i guess but that is the only redeeming quality. Peace

jxlegend: EDIT: I see I’m getting downvoted for my review. Here is what my review says: It’s a good story.
I would be pleasantly surprised if the author actually keeps the plot moving forward, but I won’t be holding my breath.  
I will get out of the way that I think this story is great if you judge by the first 10 chapters. Great pacing, characterization is fine, cool/unique way of using magic. 
In other words, it has momentum. 
But then I subbed to patreon, and read ahead, and I see the other stories the author writes, and that he relies on it for income… and there is a bit of a…. conflict of interest… between the author “milking” this story, and maintaining that momentum. And I am noticing some superfluous, arbitrary introductions in the story for purposes of lengthening it. The story does not maintain that tightness, it unravels a bit. And it’s probably the point, intentional, but I’m not here to read another “Randidly Ghostbound” or “He who fights with monsters”. At this point, after reading hundreds of stories on here and in published world, I can spot a “hook, line, sinker”, or “first one is free” kind of fiction when it’s there. 
I don’t want to be pessimistic, but I would bet good money this story will never end. 

Wawindaji: Probably nobody will read this review, so I will let myself go wild…
Honestly, I just don’t understand why there are so much 5 star.
The story is nothing ground breaking. I know, that was obvious with a title as “Generic system apocalypse”, but a lot of review boast about everything being original (more so his magic system). I am doubtful…. Probably some fan nonsense haha.
To do a little summary of the story and system :
MC is a guy with no family, no love, no futur that choose the highest level difficulty tutorial (that will give him a broken reward) and for him the apocaplypse was more a boon than a curse. So classic.
In short, the system is 3 stats : body, mind and magic with level and class. Pretty basic for me. The only little difference about the magic system : you need to create a core that will limit your type of magic (like giving you an ability) and after that, you need “wand” to use other type of magic/spell. 
Classic, well written (quality above average) but we can found story like this everywhere on Royalroad.
Sadly, I give a rating of only 50% because of the stupid MC and his big fat plot armor. So much that I don’t understand why the tag “comedy” is not there (maybe it will be added after that review ?). This make it more like a VR story than a apocalypse story. All the choice made by the MC make absolutely no sense when your live is on the line, but make sense if that was a video game. See these four exemple under spoiler (in only 7 chapter….). Another weakness, the number for a stat doesn’t seem to be really relevant. All description seem to tell you that more stats make a HUGE difference, but the story doesn’t really reflect that. Sometime the stats made a difference, sometime not….
First event, he know that he made a mistake with the difficulty level and will need a lot of luck to survive short and long term. So, you are an ex-soldier trained to all form of combat, you can invest in what you know best, your body and mind (and maybe testing slowly that new stat) to survive short term OR you can choose to invest EVERYTHING in a stats that you know absolutely nothing. Mmmm, difficult choice. So, what did he choose ? To invest everything in the new stat because “other people will not do that…”. Of course, that was somehow a good choice because with 12 point he can see “fairy” that will give him information in exchange of M&M (no comedy tag, really…) but forget to ask how work his new stat or anything related to it.  Worst of all, after all that, the first thing he does is to try to kill a monster with his body (with a spear) and mind (strategy). Remember, tutorial, difficulty impossible, MC has only base physical stat and he think he can kill a monster physically while the system give a minimun of 15 level “bonus” to survive. Of course, he survive the encounter after being trampled and even kill the monster (*cough* plot armour *cough*).
Second event, encounter with looter. MC cannot defend himself, but somehow the people prefer to let him die of thirst or monster rather than kill him and collect xp. Remember guys, tutorial, difficulty impossible, system tell you you are a sacrifice. All xp count and clearly, someone that choose difficulty “impossible” is definitely ready to do everything to win (or give up on life). But no, of course we will not kill someone that we loot and can even survive to screw us back. Or come back to see him when all our stuff start to disappear. Honestly, there was absolutely no reason to let him live and a shit load to kill him. Another good plot armour.  
Third event, 2 looters come back (others are dead), the MC level 1 succeeds in killing a level 35, with a class, that have a LOT more body (and mind) than our MC with a basic trap. Somehow, the villain didn’t see the obvious trap or tell the MC gave when he moved before the trap. Or have inhuman reflex or resistance that let him dodge the trap. Or simply throw his axes at the MC. Anyway, plot armour again *sigh*. Moreover, after that, the second looter that is better than him in level, have all her feet and have better chance to survive overall, accept without reason to let him have all the bonus stats linked to killing the mini-boss. What the hell ! Who in their right mind will give free stats to a stranger (that you don’t trust) when you can have it to yourself and when this impact your survavibility ! Moreso when you are a women that have been more or less forced to be under a “bad guy” and is now free. The first thing that you will want it’s to do everything in your power to never be in the same situation. So more stat for yourselve and not a stranger/former ennemy.
Forth event and last straw for me, the choice of the class. Remember, your live is on the line. You have a choice between two really good and versatile class but one of them give you 100 % more of a stat PER LEVEL. The MC tell us everytime that he found telekinesis “cool” (power of that class). Moreover, the class that give him more stat is exacly how he used his power since the start. The other one is situational and make trap. Better when you can have a lot of mobility. MC with his one foot doesn’t stop saying he need something that doesn’t need mobility, but you know what, the trap class seem more “fun” and I have ideas how to use that power so I choose that ! Come on… How do you want me to feel tension or fear for the MC when he “play” like he is in a video game.
In short, 2.5 star, maybe 3 if it’s supposed to be a comedy (need the tag). The character doesn’t make sense and the story is classic.

[omitted other reviews due to length and enough content shown above]

Story Post Last Updated: November 11, 2020


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