[Story] Selfish love

Title: Selfish love
Author: Meshal
Genre(s): Romance Fiction
Tags: Modern, humor, Comedy, Brothers, childhood friend, memory loss, possessiveness, rich hero
Audience: R
Main Lead: Female
Status: Hiatus/Dropped
VB Assessment Score: PDE 1 CDD 2 SWB 1 || TQ 2 SV 1 || Overall: 7
Number of Chapters: 88
Chapter Length: Short
Reading Level: Medium
Date of First Release: September 21, 2018
Date of Last Update: July 18, 2020
VB Reviewed? No
Available on Platform(s): Webnovel
Number of Views: 1M
Number of Reviews: 70
Synopsis:
Mariza risket is a shy and socially awkward girl but she’s unaware of her inner strong persona which melts for Valz Archer ,she always had a crush on Valz . She tries her best to conceal her feelings due to fear of rejection. Eventually,Mariza gathers some courage and when she’s about to unravel her love, she overhears a terribly earth-shattering conversation. From that day she declares that her love will be one-sided and she’ll never let anyone see her superfluous love for him. 
Valz archer Is an arrogant, filthy rich guy with an alpha personality. Girls fall for his attractive face and flawless body instead of his flawed personality. Valz treats everyone with his frosty behavior, he has his own fortified walls and he never lets anyone in……but that was until that coy, skittish girl came who not only fell for his blemished personality but she also thawed his walls………Life is not always of roses,you also have to face thorns-who knew these thorns will pierce the hearts of 2 lovers.

Review(s)

rashimimehta: It’s a very good story written in female lead prospective I just love the fact how she emerged as a strong character from being a silly lovestruck girl and how she survived after all wrong happened with her i would recommend to read this novel at least once

Dr_Zombie: Story seems good.
There are a few mistakes, mainly in punctuation. Other than that, it’s an interesting story. Although, I am not a fan of one sided relationship where the male is abusive to the FL. Don’t see why girls fall for that… Oh well.
Keep up the good work.

Mandy_Calhoun: The story is really great so far. There are a lot of twists and drama which leaves me wanting more. At this point in the story, anything could happen. The possibilities are endless and I can’t wait to read how the story unfolds. Great work so far Author ❤️😘

TomVanDyke: Romance isn’t exactly my usual genre, but Selfish Love looks like it has the makings of a very good novel. 
The descriptions are vivid, and the characters have quite a bit of depth to them, with plenty of potential for more. 
One negative point is that the first few chapters have a fair number of typos and punctuation errors, but this gets much better in the later chapters.

BAJJ: This story has some potential. Though their are typos, wrong positioning of punctuation marks and grammatical errors they could all be re-edit and fixed. What I like about this story is it isnt boring. Every chapters I can see improvements which is good. Good job👍🏻 and one more thing, put more efforts to your characters emotion and dont just give away all information. That’s all. 
Im adding this story to my library.☺️

killermniko: I enjoyed the back and forth between the main characters. I think what they do and what they are thinking are different at times. You explain each sentence beautifully. I just wish the chapters were longer. I feel like the breaks between chapters makes the events lose their momentum. Overall I see where this story is heading and it seems interesting. I’m not into romance focused stories, but this one feels very refreshing. Best of luck to you author.

LouYeYouLing: The story is interesting but seems to be targeted towards teenagers. Maybe it was because of the names but it felt like Spanish soap operas.  
There was quite a few grammatical mistakes in the earlier chapters. They are less noticeable in the later chapters. Paragraphs can be too long sometimes. 
Since some of the chapters can be quite short, it would be good if you can update more often.

SauceMaaster64: Very inconsistent with the names at the start. Who the eff is Joecasp? Or is it Caspjoe? I don’t know. 
Severely underusing the comma. There are many parts where a comma is needed, but there isn’t one.
Capitalization. See, if you capitalize the given name, you capitalize the surname as well. In the sypnosis, the “risket” confused me. What is a “risket”? Turns out it was a surname.
Characterization. From the start you describe Mariza as cute and meek. Suddenly she says, “I have been nothing but nice to you!” That’s completely out of character.
Using double apostrophe instead of a quotation mark. Just why? 
Walls of text. It is as easy as 1-2-3 to add spaces between paragraphs. The walls of text look unbearable to read. 
And lastly, my main problem. Point of view. You need to stick to one – it’s either first, second, or third. The sudden change in POV jarred me inside. 
That’s just my silly criticism. At the end of the day, I’m probably not much better than you. 
Also, I like the story so keep to it.

hansora: I like the premise of the story even though the ML and FL kept annoying me with their attitude. I understood that Valz has his own issues but it’s not a good idea to playing push and pull with Mariza when he has a hint that she liked it. It wasn’t fair for Mariza. And Mariza seemed kind of a pushover. But I’m hoping for her character development as you’ve stated after Valz got amnesia 😉 make her fiesty so she could shut all the witches up!
Your have good vocabulary but your sentence structure could be improved. Besides clearly identified each conversation in a paragraph instead of combining them with long sentences, I hope you’d mind to split the long sentences into a short ones. You could use connect the sentences by using commas or conjunctions but three to four sentences in a one would make the some readers helpless.
I hope you’d take my words into consideratin. I hope this story going to be better and popular 😉

Story Post Last Updated: October 22, 2020

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