[Story] Pinnacles’ Edge

Title: Pinnacles’ Edge
Author: Diivyaa
Genre(s): Romance Fiction
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Audience: G
Main Lead: Female
Status: Ongoing
Number of Chapters: 26
Date of First Release: February 2, 2019
Date of Last Update: March 25 , 2019
VB Assessment Score: TQ 3   PD 2   CF 2   ||   RL 2   CL 2  ||  Overall: 11
VB Reviewed? No
Number of Views: 29.8 K
Number of Reviews: 22
Synopsis:
A 24-year old girl was pushed to a corner. She only had herself to rely on so she pushed back harder.
Follow me into a world of violence and intrigue, my name is… Xi Jingfei

Review(s)

Chibiyaru_: This story is superb awesome good mamamia and everything else. I don’t know how to explain it. Just read it yourselves. But on thing for sure, the author knows how to expressed the feeling of the mc. The rollercoaster ride and angst. But I’m quite dissatisfied to be left hanging on a cliff bare alive.

yunisao: The first chapter definitely hooks you in. The concept and ideas behind the story is great but I think the writing could be improve. I really like how the fl is conveyed as intelligent but as a character she isn’t as fleshed out. And I think its due to the transitions of events. There not properly transitioned so the flow is bit awkward *spoilers*
*Like for example when she escapes*. Overall its an enjoyable read 🙂

LoveGazelle: Love this new novel. Hope it has a mass release. I loved how strong the MC was through out the chapters thus far.
Unlike the cliché novels, this one differs because the story isn’t predictable at all. I would be thinking this particular set of things will happen but then the twist changes it all, in a better way of course. Thank you for giving us opportunity to read such a wonderful story.
Keep going Author. I’m rooting for Xi Jingfei.

NatsumeRikka: I’ll admit, I was a bit dubious when I read the first chapter but the later chapters were of improved quality and enjoyed reading it a lot. The storyline is cliché but at the same time it’s not. What I mean is that I can’t predict when a twist’s gone appear. So far, I love the story. My suggestions are:
1) To get someone to edit the first few chapters
2) Add some spaces between the lines(for dialogues)
3) Write a synopsis. This is the most important one. A synopsis is what attracts and gets the reader’s interests.
Hoping for more chapters. Thank you.

nothingisit4me: If you love romance within dangerous settings filled with twists and turns where you have no idea how everything will end up, then this is the book for you! I loved how it started with ****** vivid imagery, then dashed into the sequence of events that keep you on your edge.
While I’m not a fan of romance at all, this book is one of the exceptions.
Grammar is pretty good with a couple of negligible mistakes.
But, the story makes you want to ignore them.
Keep it up author! >3</

CailinMatthews: The story has an interesting plot. The pacing is also good. I feel like I’m watching movies based on its transitions.
I’m halfway through the available chapters. It’s been a roller coaster. It becomes calm then, it intensifies. This happened several times and it’s a good mix. The beginning scenes are just right to capture a reader’s attention and the rest of it just makes you want to keep going to know what happens next.
The main character works for the government. I liked that. I hardly see any stories with that line of work. It’s a dangerous job—especially for people with righteous hearts.
There’s a lot of emphasis on the hard drive. I’m starting to become skeptical to how big of a deal it is. It could be anything but with that kind of build up, I sincerely hope the author delivers. It could make or break the story.
I have this in my library! I’m looking forward to the rest. Have a good day!

Take_the_Moon: Positive Points: Female character with strong and “intelligent” personality; a good motivation behind revenge; The first chapter was a very captivating chapter. And grammar is not bad.
Negative points: After chapter 01, the other chapters are short and without consistency, as if something was missing; The intelligence of the MC is very exalted, even when she does stupid things, for example, she could have fled before her family was killed, but only ran away after the family died; Your description has one thing that I detest the exaltation of the intelligence of a character without real evidence of intelligence. Well, so far I have not seen anything clever in her actions. Now if you substitute intelligence for resilience or will power, then it would make more sense since so far it has shown more strength of character and resilience than intelligence. Another point, the structure of this world was not clearly explained, it would be good to have put it right at the beginning of the novel to situate the reader in the novel.
Overall: I had a great deal of expectation about the novel, but the chapters that followed were short and did not involve that first chapter. Anyway, for those who like a story of revenge, this romance is not bad, but I feel that the author could do much more with this story.

Chryiss: Writing: 5
It’s not perfect. There are some minor mistakes, bu they’re not glaring, so overall it’s passable. My biggest qualm would be the use of Name: for speeches. It should be formatted as Name said/shouted/cried/etc. with an comma quotation or vice versa. Or have gestures and expressions in between speech to let the reader know who’s speaking. It also heightens the reading experience.
Updates: 5
Fine enough for me.
Story: 4
It’s a different type of story, more like a crime drama, so kudos for doing something uncommon. However, while ambitious, it lacks execution. Rather than feeling suspenseful, it felt like everything was out into the open. Adding more mystery, such as not revealing MC’s true family background and discovering it in a more dramatic way, would greatly increase the lacking *******. MC also is a little too open and not cautious by immediately telling her connections with Zhao to Samuel. It doesn’t quite feel consistent with what I expected/was lead to expect of her character. Moving onto…
Characters: 3
The MC is atypical still, so that’s a good point of differentiation from female leads. But, like mentioned earlier, it’s not quite there/the strong-smart FL isn’t fully accomplished/convincing. Additionally, the other characters lacked substance. It felt like some human, realistic puzzle piece was missing. With Samuel, we got his backstory, but somehow, it didn’t strike me in any sentimental way. It felt like a tell without an actual show.
I think a lot of the story and character inconsistencies can benefit from deeper delving into their histories and emotions as well as their motivations and beliefs in life. MC’s killing felt anti-climatic, it came too soon. While she showed some real, human reaction to killing a person, it made me wonder why? Why is the way she wants to deal with all her suffering? Does she wish a quick end to only run from the authorities the rest of her life? How about bringing the whole issue to light? Making him suffer more? I couldn’t figure out her innermost pain and anger turned into believable action. Maybe we’ll see some of this later, but the killing still felt…too sudden. Lastly, she accepts her new identity pretty easily. From how she dealt with it and encountered people, it felt like this dual identity didn’t make much of a difference in the story, like it could easily be revised without it.
World: 4
Details and descriptions of world and settings were sufficient for basic imagination of the surroundings and construction, but total comprehension and immersion wasn’t quite accomplished. Questions like the standing of families and their connections with the sovereign law and authorities as well as even the entertainment industry considering the amount of times MC sang. (I also didn’t see the connection of this subplot/talent of hers into the whole crime drama.)
Overall: 4.2
A story with great ambition in its desire for something different and substantial but one that did not quite achieve all the expectations set for itself. It has the makings for a fabulous crime romance drama, but it drags and speeds up in places where it should do the opposite to create the underlying psychological and philosophical claims and power which spur the story forth in believability and thrill. Once all the pieces are strung together convincingly and cohesively, this is a winner.

 
Story Post Last Updated: March 26, 2019

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