[Story] Winter’s Chill: She Wept in Sorrow

Title: Winter’s Chill: She Wept in Sorrow
Author: Leialeial
Genre(s): Romance Fiction
Tags:
Audience: PG
Main Lead: Female
Status: Ongoing
Number of Chapters: 59
Date of First Release: May 12, 2018
Date of Last Update: October 5, 2018
VB Assessment Score: TQ 3   PD 2   CF 2   ||   RL 2   CL 3  ||  Overall: 12
VB Reviewed? No
Number of Views: 302.6 K
Number of Reviews: 9
Synopsis:
Mai had one purpose in life: to be a sacrifice. As such, the villagers of the village that Mai lived in treated her as just a sacrifice- she was treated with disdain and dislike.
Not to be discouraged, Mai blatantly accepts her fate, determined to tell God that asking for sacrifices was stupid. When she had finally turned 12-years old and about to be buried alive underneath the cold, hard ground, something surprising occurs.

Review(s)

SweetsTomato: I’m not good at grammar so i’ll skip the grammar matter and give it to those experts. The story is slow developed as author stated but after read for 6 chapters i still can’t find the reason for sacrifice.
In ancient time usually sacrifice offered to God for the blessing or to remove disaster/plague. In this story i don’t know what this sacrifice use for.
Thrill that build in first chapter somehow disappears until the chapter when sacrifice conducted, and that’s quite long.
Character design is good, reader step by step can judge how the main character personality developed.
For reader that enjoys romance, this romance story maybe will suit your taste.

DeJeL: *Remember, this review is based on the first 5 chapters.*
Constructive Criticism: I would like to see a bit more of the structure of her current world… also, the first two chapters felt very slow when I was reading them though you came in with a good story shortly thereafter… I don’t know a way to correct this if it can be, but I do suggest that you ask people to read at least 3 chapters before deciding whether or not to read your book, for it does take that long to be clear if one would like the story or not.;,;.
Positive Feedback: Very good character development and decently clear plot and world design.
Personal Feedback: At first I thought that this novel was going to be prosaic, however, after reading all the way to chapter five, I actually found it to be very alluring. I did not want to stop, but I have other stories to both review and to catch up to, so, for now, I have to (metaphorically) put the book down. I will pick it back up when I am able.;,;.

 
Story Post Last Updated: March 21, 2019

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