[Story] Transmigrated by Accident

Title: Transmigrated by Accident
Author: EldridSmith
Genre(s): Fantasy
Tags: System, Sword and Magic, Action and Adventure, Transmigration, Comedy, OP, Male Protagonist, Light Hearted
Audience: PG-13
Main Lead: Male
Status: Ongoing
Number of Chapters: 23
Date of First Release: October 20, 2018
Date of Last Update: February 5, 2019
VB Assessment Score: TQ  3  PD 2   CF 1   ||   RL 1   CL 2  ||  Overall: 9
VB Reviewed? No
Number of Views: 353.7 K
Number of Reviews: 24
Synopsis:
A random 17 year old was transmigrated to the world of Golkindarr; where magic is reality. As he arrived the lord of the realm realized he made a mistake and granted him with 1 wish.
He wished for a system, and now he embarks on the path of cultivation, with a goal to bring all his friends over to join him on a grand adventure for the ages, and because it’ll be more fun.

Review(s)

Mav12: First of all, i like storyy sooooo much. I just hope the author see this and keep uploading.
For me this is for me so far is a light hearted story, with likable MC and a little bit of comedy. The world building and character background is still not clear enough but i think its better this way, i mean like i said its a light hearted story and you dont want so much info dump crap for this kind of story, still i hope slowly but surely the author could talk a little more what kind of world hes building, the connection between every character. You could after a little bit talk about the world, make it so that they creating a organization just by them self to make name for them self, no need for a heavy conflict or something like that, its just because how playful they are. Its just my suggestion, i mean i think that gonna be interesting. Anyway i just hope you keep on uploading new chapters. Good luck.

daoist_om: I still say that mc and his friend accepted their transmigration little too easily exposition should be done moderately sometimes it just crosses the line a little
now for good things
very nice descriptions the author is trying to create a picturesque feel to the novel and is mostly succeeding mc friendship feels real, It is one moot point in which this novel hit it out of the park for me. the power system is well explained and so is world-building done nicely and the author isn’t spoon feeding which is a very good thing. It’s a surprisingly good novel and I wish it all the best

SnoozySloth: Note: I give 5 stars regardless of what I write below. I wrote this review as of 7 chapters.
Writing Quality 3.5/5. This is the main area the novel suffers, though its still relatively easy to read. There are a lot of run-on sentences. Some poor sentence structuring. A lot of comma misuse. Still, I wouldn’t let that turn you away from this novel, because it’s a quick read that’s easy to follow.
Updates: Dunno. New reader.
Story Development 4.5/5: We’ve got some interesting developments happening very quickly. It kept my interest, which is relatively rare for most novels these days. Minus half a point for unnecessary overuse of time-skips.
Character Design 4/5: What’s the difference between Adrian and Eldrid except that one is lucky/athletic and one is fat? Their personalities and emotions need to be fleshed out more. They don’t express themselves when things happen. No frowning, questioning, sarcasm, trembling/fear, etc. Despite that, I like both characters. But some potential is being wasted here.
World Background 5/5: I know what’s happening. Things only get more interesting as you go with the introduction of Adrian’s master.
Final thoughts: You’re doing a good job. Your ideas and story pacing are both excellent. Work on grammar, sentence structure, and character emotions. Then your novel will soar in quality. I gave you some example comments in the first three chapters. I hope they help.
Story Post Last Updated: March 18, 2019

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