Title: Love, Tale
Genre(s): Romance Fiction
Main Lead: Female
Number of Chapters: 49
Date of First Release: January 24, 201
Date of Last Update: March 18, 2019
VB Assessment Score: TQ 2 PD 1 CF 2 || RL 1 CL 2 || Overall: 8
VB Reviewed? No
Number of Views: 21.4 K
Number of Reviews: 9
Strikingly beautiful young Tale is a girl whose hearts longs for adventure, love, excitement and all the beauty of this world. Find out what happens when she finally finds the courage to leave the four walls of an office into an intriguing world she had always only dreamed of with a man she isn’t sure knows exactly what he wants.
Zhang Su Yan is the heir to the biggest civil engineering company in all of China, the only son of his parents and a carefree human deep down. He finds himself in Africa, on Nigerian soil to break grounds with the government of the country. He had dealt with a past love that had left a scar and was content with his life as it was, or so he thought.
The boy within him takes over when he meets with a stubborn accountant with a shrewd head for business. A black skin goddess, who wanted nothing more than to live a life full of beautiful moments and memories.
Find out what happens when this two discover the price for desire, risk, adventure…and maybe, Love.
CailinMatthews: Just a guy waltzing in a girl’s sheltered life…
… if only it were that easy.
So far, I like the idea of the story. I haven’t read much of the development but I’d like to hear more from the male main character. I can read the female’s thoughts but not so much of the male’s. Like what he thought of her actions after spending time with her and why he wants to be around her more. I get the initial attraction but I’d just find it sweeter to know his thoughts as well.
Overall, it’s a single lady’s dream romantic encounter. I know I’ve daydreamed something similar.
tiansheng: First I need to say that it’s mischievous of you to create more Asian boy dreams in the heads of the poor girls that will fall prey to your story. I’m kidding.
Writing quality is pretty good. Some mistakes here and there that can be corrected with a bit of editing, but nothing that prevents my ability to enjoy the story.
The story progresses steadily, and the beginning can easily be related to (I can relate). So far, the main character is compelling, but I don’t have much to say about world background at the moment (then again I’m a sucker for fantasy, so I’m probably biased).
It’s a bit soon for me to judge the plot, but I believe your story has a lot of potential for those interested in romance fiction. (like me :D)
Best of luck!
Lovelywuju17: Hai, this is my review. (^u^)/
Writing: It’s not bad. You need to check the misspell words and capitalized letters and quotations. Coma and dots. It’s quite important. You need to clean it up a bit. I recommend you to find an editor, or you can use Grammarly for misspelling. It struggles, yes, especially for details, just like in my novel.
Story: It keeps getting interesting along the way. But, sometimes you describe it well, sometimes not. You need to work on more on how the characters express themselves. It’s too straightforward or if that is your intention. Just like the first thirty chapters of my novel (Haha) Well, I see a room to improve.
Stability: Take your time and made a schedule for weeks, like how many chapters you want to post. You don’t need to force yourself to post it every day. If you are sick or drained of ideas, just post a chapter no chapter for today. The reader will understand.
But if you want to attract more readers, well, every day is a must, just don’t torture yourself like me. #dead
Character Design: Quite a lot of diversity there, Nigerian, Chinese even Korean I think? It’s quite funny when they interact with each other. Oh, I suggest you should NOT put a sarcasm among each other rase. For example, I see a sentence when FL said about Chinese is short to the ML. Damn. I know it’s a stereotype and she’s not intended to say it like that. But, uhh…
Well, I’m not Chinese but if the people origin from Chinese reading this. It’s quite offensive. I suggest you research about the cultures and characteristics of the countries. Watch how you describe them.
World Background: I just want to ask, sorry if I’m wrong. The setting is it in Nigeria? I just need to confirm it. Haha, because that’s how I imagine it. I’ve never been to Nigeria before. But, I have a friend in Ghana. I hope you can put a more interesting culture from your country there.
Keep good work! I know you can do better! 😀
Story Post Last Updated: March 18, 2019