[Story] I am a Mafia Boss

Title: I am a Mafia Boss
Author: Elotra
Genre(s): Romance Fiction
Tags:
Audience: PG-13
Main Lead: Female
Status: Ongoing
Number of Chapters: 21
Date of First Release: January 23, 2019
Date of Last Update: March 3, 2019
VB Assessment Score: TQ 2   PD 1   CF 1   ||   RL 1   CL 3   ||| Overall: 8
VB Reviewed? Yes
Number of Views: 30.8 K
Number of Reviews: 8
Synopsis:
After years of running from her family, the estranged Mio, returns home.
She returns determined to break a marriage agreement between her and another gang. However, she is shocked when she finds out, that it is more complicated than she thought.

Review(s)

BaiQiuyue: Hello! I found the beginning of this story entertaining. There is a lot you can do with this plot. Mio seems like a strong woman and the way she was when young reveals she used to have a bit of ‘danger’ to her. I’d really like to see how it plays out in her future. How far will she go to try and break out of her arranged marriage? I especially would like to see you flesh out the organization more in the future. For example, the hierarchy? Status. Their roles, goals, etc. As for my rating, since this only the first chapter I’ve decided to give you three stars for each section for now. Also, so your readers can smoothly read your story I recommend using any free grammar checker to clean up on errors. So far it’s a nice start, so please keep writing! ^_^

Darkjokes: This has been so fun to read. The moments between Mio and her minions are so fun to read and the chapters are decent size as well. Mio seems like a very interesting character tbh. Much more fun then your typical cliche Female Mc

NEidarous: I like female lead; strong and fun. Interesting and entertaining story so far. Writing quality is good, Character designs is good as well. Great work author.

nothingisit4me: Whoo! Mafia and love! The protagonist, Mio, is a strong female lead, which is a plus. I liked the interactions between her minions and the mysterious Jacob entering the fray. While the story had just begun, I cannot say that much about it.
The grammar is fine, but there are some punctuation errors here and there along with awkward phrasings.
But, keep writing author! Fight on! >3</

 
Story Post Last Updated: March 18, 2019

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