[Story] Dark Lord of Tartarus

Title: Dark Lord of Tartarus
Author: Bojayjay
Genre(s): Fantasy
Tags:
Audience: PG
Main Lead: Male
Status: Ongoing
Number of Chapters: 35
Date of First Release: September 20, 2018
Date of Last Update: March 18, 2019
VB Assessment Score: TQ 2   PD 2   CF 1   ||   RL 1   CL 3  ||  Overall: 9
VB Reviewed? No
Number of Views: 99.8 K
Number of Reviews: 3
Synopsis:
Xyn Draven Nightfall, a spellcaster that is one of the ungifted people in this world of magic. He was not all powerful, so he can’t beat every opponent he may face. But, because of his past experiences, he unlocked a power within him. A power that’s unusual, the power of darkness. He exercised and practiced his new found power and was able to easily defeat his enemy in a tournament. As he became even more powerful, he seeks to make things a reality. Thus, he created his own living beings with his magic. To test his creations’ abilities and his own, Nightfall led an attack and they unleashed a fraction of their power to the world. Because of his actions, a company of people that claim themselves as protectors of the world, seeks to banish Nightfall from this world. Will they succeed?

Review(s)

Pgmiz: The writing quality needs to be improved and the more one writes the better they get. Although I understood the concept of this novel, the dialogue between characters are hard to follow (who said what…?). I assuming English is not the first language; be patient with author if you read this gem.
There is some contradiction between, the present tense and past tense, especially with sentence structuring…which can be fixed with editing.
Overall good job author your writing gets better with each chapter that is read. Keep it up!

Galass: The story development, the character design and the writing quality are very good. The world background is not very detailed but I will look further to it. Continue your amazing good work.

 

Story Post Last Updated: March 18, 2019

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